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Leinnan

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There are some which I've intentionally skipped because I either don't know what it means or don't know what to suggest as replacement.

d30 = "You give it to me or I need to kill you?!"
suggested correction = "Will you give it to me or do I need to kill you?!"
will, do.

d44 = "Come back to me when you pass all the news and you will get paid."
suggested correction = "Come back to me when you're done telling the news and you will get paid."
you're done telling.

d50 = "I have important task for you. $burmistrz_od$ from $locname_od$ sent me a package but unfortunately it fell into the hands of bandits. Can you take it back?"
suggested correction = "I have important task for you. $burmistrz_od$ from $locname_od$ sent me a package, but unfortunately it fell into the hands of bandits. Can you take it back?"
comma.

d57 = "Excellent work! Contents of this package is very important to me."
suggested correction = "Excellent work! The contents of this package are very important to me."
the, are.

d58 = "Take that 500 gold pieces and my thanks."
suggested correction = "You have my thanks. Take these 500 gold pieces."
You have my thanks, these.

d64 = "If you fail to do this in a month, family will have to pay a ransom."
suggested correction = "If you fail to complete this task in a month, the family will have to pay a ransom."
complete, task, the.

oh and please replace all the "fallow"s by "follow"

This is my share of work for the day, expect more soon
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d50 = "I have important task for you. $burmistrz_od$ from $locname_od$ sent me a package, but unfortunately it fell into the hands of bandits. Can you take it back?"

I had forgotten to add the word an before important task
I don't know why it slipped through my detection.

Here is my currently suggested correction of d50:
 
"I have an important task for you. $burmistrz_od$ from $locname_od$ sent me a package, but unfortunately it fell into the hands of bandits. Can you take it back?"

More corrections to come soon!